Hmmm... already been said, but this has awesome potential.

And since its' been awhile from the last update, I demand it to be finished! Muahahahaha!

*cough*

Well, so far a can see a wave a emotion, starting at consideration, then fact(oid?), then a resolution (in the future?).

Very cool so far!

Later and all that jazz,
Holly

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illussions of happiness?
It is in some way an illussion
but so is being unhappy...
live dark or live light,
both have positive & negative results.
accept the whole spectrum of feelings
happiness is not a destination

i dont at all feel qualified to comment on most writings...but i do like it...not nearly as much as some of your other work, but still good...

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"If you could be any better than you are right now... you would be"

It's good. I especially like the 2nd verse:
All the rules
we never follow.
All the pride
we've learned to swallow.

And I'm questioning on the 4th & 5th verses: What or who are you trying to measure up to? And what is normal? (& even if we knew, who wants to be normal?) Be you. Those who know & love you, do so for who you are, whether it be in spite of you or because of you, most likely some of both as is with all of us. If you see something you want to change in Dorothy, do it. If you're thinking someone else sees something they want to change in you, screw them! Be yourself, Dorothy. You can't fall short of being your own self.

By the way, congrats on the AH guy. I hope everything works out the best way for you that it can. He's certainly been the inspiration for some good poetry! Keep writing.

Also, please remember what I said about searching for your happiness in another person. There's your illusion. It's in you. Be you. You'll find it.

oo- i like this!